Comments on: A Lone Pine Cone http://dailystanza.com/2009/06/01/lone-pine-cone/ Daily poetry for inspiration, emotion, and thought. Sun, 12 Jul 2009 21:00:02 -0700 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.0 By: James http://dailystanza.com/2009/06/01/lone-pine-cone/comment-page-1/#comment-14 James Fri, 26 Jun 2009 21:55:58 +0000 http://dailystanza.com/?p=296#comment-14 Thank you for commenting, I fixed the spelling mistake and apologize for the clichés. I don't write poetry that often but I will avoid using them in the future. Thank you for commenting, I fixed the spelling mistake and apologize for the clichés. I don’t write poetry that often but I will avoid using them in the future.

]]> By: Rethabile http://dailystanza.com/2009/06/01/lone-pine-cone/comment-page-1/#comment-13 Rethabile Fri, 26 Jun 2009 17:53:24 +0000 http://dailystanza.com/?p=296#comment-13 Hi, I read your poem and must apologise for wanting to comment. I mean no ill-will by doing so, just that I like the sound of your poem but stayed with these thoughts that I communicate to you here. The opening line hooked me. It is simple and natural and evokes a certain pleasant feeling. In the second line you use "stick out like a sore thumb" which I find unfresh and over-used. It killed the initial euphoria I had upon entering the poem. Then I was intrigued again: "How did it end up in the middle of the field, Hidden from the machine’s blades — it remains concealed." I wanted to know. Everything went well for me... I didn't even notice the end-rhymes. Then the last line used a cliché: "in dire straights", and misspelt, too (in dire straits is the right spelling). I love the way you approached and told this poem (otherwise I wouldn't have stayed to comment). I mean no harm. Just thoughts I had on reading your work. Best Hi, I read your poem and must apologise for wanting to comment. I mean no ill-will by doing so, just that I like the sound of your poem but stayed with these thoughts that I communicate to you here.

The opening line hooked me. It is simple and natural and evokes a certain pleasant feeling.

In the second line you use “stick out like a sore thumb” which I find unfresh and over-used. It killed the initial euphoria I had upon entering the poem.

Then I was intrigued again:
“How did it end up in the middle of the field,
Hidden from the machine’s blades — it remains concealed.”

I wanted to know.

Everything went well for me… I didn’t even notice the end-rhymes. Then the last line used a cliché: “in dire straights”, and misspelt, too (in dire straits is the right spelling).

I love the way you approached and told this poem (otherwise I wouldn’t have stayed to comment). I mean no harm. Just thoughts I had on reading your work.
Best

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